| Friday: Work Day |
[Mar. 20th, 2010|12:16 am]
e_moon60
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Today was another slog at revisions--the "write sentence, remove half the words, shift over one, and repeat..." sort. I know what needs to be done in the scene, but there's no flow at all, and it's crucial that every nuance carry to the reader. Right now the reader would be going "ouch-ouch-ouch" from the roughness, like walking on sharp stones, when what need to happen is a slow flow of information to the backbrain without tickling analysis. Yet.
If that's not sufficiently obscure, I could go on....
No? OK, then. Between work sessions on the revisions and some CE questions, I was involved in fabricating the lamb carcass from yesterday, now well-chilled. Another learning experience (were any two of the lamb chops I cut the same thickness?) but also fun. The big meat saw glides easily through meat, and split the backbone smoothly and effortlessly (well, the steering took some effort, trying to go right up the middle, but that was thought not muscle. More of the pieces look like something found in a meat market than in previous attempts where they looked like something done by novices (uh-huh!) with improvised tools (yup)--good equipment makes a huge difference.
The cutting up and grinding of some of the tougher bits book only a few hours--the cleaning of machinery and so on took several more. I am now completely intolerant of books in which the villain cuts up the victim with his carpentry power tools and doesn't leave enough trace to be noticed by the most casual and ignorant visitor. Ha, ho, and finger-pointing.
Because it's our lamb and our meat (rancher friend & wife declining to take any) I brought home all the readily portable bits of machinery to clean here. Then I cooked lamb chops. Beautiful lamb chops and delicious as well. The one that I cut way too thick will be stuffed another day. I'm thinking what to stuff it with: chopped parsley/mint/garlic/onion probably.
Then it was back to work on the scene that's now tied itself in a Gordian knot...just not sure which sword to cleave it with...hmmm...maybe a POV change. The point is that it has to be...oh. Wait. The problem isn't *there*...the problem is a chapter or two *back*. AHA. |
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