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Revision: The Chainsaw of Correction [Oct. 22nd, 2011|01:57 pm]
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The Chainsaw of Correction Is Being  Applied to Scenes of Great
Beauty and No Particular Utility.

There was snarling from the Chainsaw
And weeping from the words
As whole paragraphs broke open
and stray letters flew like birds.
There was savagery and violence
beneath the Chainsaw's roar
And the velvet curtains shredded
In a whirlwind of rose gore.

For the Writer had decreed
from her throne and keyboard fine,
"There has got to be some cutting!
I must draw a thick black line!
Though this character is charming
Though her face is very fair
She must earn her place in this book
Or I'll yank her out of there!"

"But" the fair-faced character pleaded
"I'm a queen, you know that well!
I am gracious, I am stately
And I fight so very well."
"Then advance the plot," cried Writer
As the Chainsaw snarled its song,
"Or like all this other rubbish
You'll be gone by midnight's gong."

Though it's vivid, no description
Can escape the Chainsaw's bite
Without being more plot-relevant
Than a tourist's pretty sight.
Conversations too are falling
One by one and two by two
And as branches crash around them
Story's real road comes in view.

Weighty ponderings of nobles,
Clever backchat from a child,
Long and boring dissertations:
Their death sentences are filed.
Does it matter who dismounted first?
Not a bit...then cut it out.
Does it matter what they ate for lunch
or what they talked about?

Ever onward through the undergrowth
The Chainsaw snarls its way...
(But writing verse will not get done
What must be done today.)


(Brought to you by your friendly local verse daemon and stopped mid-stanza by the harried writer.)

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[User Picture]From: mrs_redboots
2011-10-22 07:03 pm (UTC)
Love it!!!
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From: (Anonymous)
2011-10-24 04:43 am (UTC)

Seconded!

Heheheh I'm glad I'm not the only one who gets shanghaied by a mad verse daemon. Sometimes mine even comes out in song... though I can't carry a tune, and must thereafter apologize.

~Gretchen in Minneapolis
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[User Picture]From: singindemonhq
2011-10-22 07:40 pm (UTC)

friendly local verse daemon

Now, cut and prune and edit as you choose
most stories have a little weight to lose.
(My own cast sing of every tear or thrill -
Stopping mid-stanza can take too much will)
May pruning shape out every path and twist
and dance your way to the best-seller list!
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[User Picture]From: singindemonhq
2011-10-30 10:02 pm (UTC)

Re: friendly local verse daemon - OOC

Thank you, a friend made me the icon as a birthday present and still think it's one of the best I've ever seen. How did you get the episode burned on cd? I'd love to do that.

(please excuse the long delay in replying, been quite ill.)
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[User Picture]From: redvixen
2011-10-22 10:38 pm (UTC)
Check to see what your display settings are for her journal under Manage Friends. I had that happen with one of my friends and found that changing the display settings worked.
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[User Picture]From: gifted
2011-10-23 09:45 am (UTC)
Fantastic. :D
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From: (Anonymous)
2011-10-23 11:15 am (UTC)

After the chainsaw

This is Karen -- and I'm sorry I don't do the auto-authenticate stuff.

I know it's a little early in this world for mid-winter's feast, and the great bonfire that accompanies it -- but can we at least hope to soon celebrate Thanksgiving, for what has survived, and for those excerpts that you will be able to share, once they are no-longer attached to the mighty oak? (Since some of us love the useless scenes, when they are of great beauty, and can no longer slow the pace of the book.)

Here's a mug of coffee to your verse daemon, your chainsaw, and the wild and crazy way that trees will grow when they are left unpruned!
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[User Picture]From: green_knight
2011-10-24 08:23 am (UTC)
Brava. I hope the characters dodged in time and that they won't gang up on you.
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[User Picture]From: filkferengi
2011-10-30 03:10 pm (UTC)
Vivid, funny, and, alas, too true; brava!
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